Tuesday 16 September 2014

#TantalizingTuesdays - Winning

It's time to tease you again, and this fine Tuesday I've got a somewhat emotional one for you. You have been warned....


(Source: Pinterest
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Grace pulled the coat tighter around herself, as a particularly powerful gust of wind threatened to tumble her down the steep cliff path. Fighting tears, she was almost tempted to let it. Anything had to be better than this aching void she was left with. God she missed him.
Her belly twitched, reminding her why she couldn’t give up, and Grace smiled through her tears. Their child would never know their daddy. He would never know the treatment had worked this time—finally.
Carefully negotiating the rickety steps Grace made her way down to the water’s edge, and let the spray of the sea wash away her tears.
Baby Anna kicked again, as though to remind her that she was here, and Grace took the urn out of her bag.
It seemed fitting to end their journey here on this beach. The passage of time had corroded the cliffs, in much the same way as the cancer had corroded Jenson’s body, until only his shell remained, and the little frozen vials, he’d insisted on storing before he started the chemo.
Grace tipped his ashes into the wind.

“Fly my love, and know that you won the war in the end.”



Tantalizing Tuesday Authors use a photo prompt to tease in 200 words. Please click on the graphic to check out the other fabulous participating authors.


As ever, let me know what you thought of my teaser today. 

D xx 

16 comments:

  1. How heartbreaking. Beautifully written. You squeeze so much into 200 words.

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  2. Simply beautiful...and heart rending. xx

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  3. That is just beautiful. You honed your words so finely, paced with a heartbeat, the sad melancholy tale packs quite a wallop. Very heart-wrenching but a happy, upbeat ending leaves us joyful and hopeful. I was moved to tears. I loved this, Doris. xo

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  4. Your writing is so tight. Honed to produce a teaser with perfect visuals, huge emotion and a touch of reality. It brought a lump to my throat as I lived everything with her

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  5. well done Doris very emotional

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Julie :-)

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  6. Oh my god Doris. You made me cry. What a touching tease. Thank goodness for baby Anna ♡♡♡

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    1. *hands Jessica a tissue* Thank you x

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  7. A hauntingly beautiful piece, well written and full of emotion *doffs cap*

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  8. Wow, definitely a moving piece. If it wasn't from baby Ana reminding her, who knew what she was capable of doing. Nice.

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  9. that was heart breaking yet also so expertly written.

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